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[caught in the rain]: 257.Pawnbyalic
Rating: 0.65 Uploaded by: Created: 2007-03-08 16:51:06Keywords: Song/Album title: PawnGenre:OtherFinished:FinishedLicense:Free to playYup. Doing abit of recording work so heres you are :)
Hope you enjoy it
Lyrics:
I feel like a pawn
On a glass chessboard
Moving one step at a time
One wrong move and then im slaughtered
And I feel I
Could easily Break
Shatter into a million peices
With just one simple mistake
Ch: There are arrows over my head
Pointing in different directions
clours quoting the things I have said
Many mistakes yet to be corrected
Life is a long winding road
with many obsticals as you go
Rainbow colours in your hair
music brings us back home
And sometimes I
Fall back down on my knees
watch you staring staight at me
As I cry about these.. wasys
Ch: There are arrows over my head
Pointing in different directions
clours quoting the things I have said
Many mistakes yet to be corrected
Life is a long winding road
with many obsticals as you go
Rainbow colours in your hair
music brings us back home
2007-02-19 Spiral Dragon: Wow... I really like this one, you did a good job. :D I would soon even better if is was outside of somthing, to give it a echo... I'm not sure. Nice job.
2007-02-19 caught in the rain: :D thankyou so much!!!! ^___^ and yeah Ill try it out sometime :P >>; :)
2007-02-21 Spiral Dragon: Your welcome :D
Do you have a music program that could add the effect? That might be a little easier.
^_^ I can't wait to hear more!
2007-02-25 caught in the rain: hmm.. well.. WE JUST BOUGHT A PEDDAL so hopefully with a bit of messing around i can acheive it :p I wonder.
and thankyou!!! :D
2007-02-26 Spiral Dragon: No Problem ;)
2007-03-05 Vintage Rhymes and Valentines: GOLD! I have a bit of trouble catching every single bit of the lyric. It would be nice if you could post the words so I could read along. The lyrics I do hear are clever and refreshing to my ears which have been bleeding do to all the metal on this site. I can hear the melody and guitar riffs change but I think your average listener would lose interest and I think you deserve our full attention. So, I reccomend a second guitar part or maybe an orchestra fake or not. I love the ending it's amazing.
The use of the line "long winding road" maybe be a tad bit cliche but I think you pulled it off beautifully. I liked the bit you said about "arrows over your head" or something to that affect. That was cool.
2007-03-09 vincehearn: Hi there, This is the first song i've listened too on this site and I must say you have some good ideas but you should take it to the next level. Don't be afraid to publish this song on myspace or develop it further. Bit of work on guitar and some dynamic in the voice. Even some other instruments to enter later in the piece to give it a real creative edge and climax.
2007-03-15 caught in the rain: I'm hopefully going to be re-recording this song in April or August. sometime :p and Some awesome musicians are gonna play with. so hopefully i'll get the finished one up. this is actually just a demo :3 and I know it goes on too long so im working stuff out. any help or ideas would be awesome <3
2007-03-18 Rolo: That was a great track, you have an excellent voice! The song reminds me of angie hart :D Listening to it, I think of where I'd put in strings if i could (cellos and what not) and harmonies on the chorus as the song progresses, can't wait to hear what you will do with it when you re-record it!