2006-04-08 Moonknight: I can barely hear your voice, but this is very nice :)
if you recorded this properly it would be great, You need to vary the guitar riff a little, to differentiate the different sections of the song more, try changing the chords a little, or play the chorus harmony in a different manner , a small detail can go a long way :)

2006-04-08 caught in the rain: thankyou :) ill try and see what I can do and see how it goes ^_^ uh.. my voice O_o well bad recorder >> but yeah ah well :) thankyou

2006-04-09 exmember5: it's nice!
the voice is really marvelous!
well the guitar part.... needs improvement. and i mean a lot of it.
it's ok anyway for the first tracks to be turned out this way.
i've been there so i know how you feel.

2006-04-20 zoloftzantac: It's cool :) your voice is lovely and your lyrics are nice and have a good melody.

I'd love to be able to hear your voice better, but I know that getting a good quality recording can be tricky. Keep experimenting with things to see what works best. (for example I eventualy found that wrapping a clean sock around my mic made my recordings sound much better ^_^)

I like your main riff, and I can tell you chorus riff is differant, but it kinda doesn't *feel* differant, you know? If you changed to another chord for that part it would really help it to feel like a differant part of the song.

I saw on your house were you said, Im not so good at guitar yet though. >,<

Don't be too hard on yourself, we all have been there. With your voice you've got tons of potential, keep practicing and keep playing and more good things will come from it. ^_^

2006-04-21 exmember5: what's the change if you wrap stinky used socks @_@

2006-05-09 Rolo: i'd love to hear some harmonies in there. Definately invest in a better mic, try using audacity too (look it up on google) they recommend it alot on here, and i find it helps as a simple software package (free) that allows you to multitrack, boost vocals and put effects on the tracks. If you have nero you can use that too, you can put your songs in a playlist to burn using nero, and click properties and put de-hiss filters on it, as well as echo and fade ins and outs. Definately try and re-record this, i love the lyrics and your voice is really good so make the most of it :D!

2006-05-12 Tyrana: I don't want to just copy other peoples' comments... But in a community of musicians, people tend to pick out the same things. ^_^...

Your voice really is beautiful. It was very unexpected for me, as it says "singing is bad." But it really is just the recording thing.

I wish I had fresh suggestions, but I don't O_o. I just thought I'd let you know I really enjoyed this!

2006-05-14 caught in the rain: thankyou all <3 :)

2006-05-16 exmember1: i play guitar rarely.... you'll be good at it.

i love your voice

2006-06-01 Starfish Telex: This touches and enchants me. The voice is indeed muffled ( and even distorted a bit ), which is maybe not intended, but it indeed has got a certain charm of it's own still. The minimalistic instrumenting - although it is held upon the same chords and the almost similar continuing riff - plus the beautifully strong lyrical words make it a true artwork. The whole song has got a dreamy, transfigured and intimate mood to it. Forlorn but still somehow with a ray of silverlining, it feels like you look through a window glass full of rain and daydream viewing back upon a painful experience, somehow like you would be upon a turning point in your life, within a moment all by yourself, allowing the listener to take part of it. And the lyrics are just very expressive and graceful, in the atmospherical whole of this.
I already listened to it four times, one behind the other, by now and will also listen to it more times, after writing this.
It is imperfect, but perfect at the same time. Only with the imperfection it makes what it is.

2006-06-01 Starfish Telex: Oh! And looking at your house, now, I am more than astonished that you are not older than 13!
Gosh, what ingenious songs will you only write, if you are older and mastering guitar and voice even better! ( And what marvellous lyrics! )

2006-06-01 Starfish Telex: Well, you remind me a bit of SONYA HUNTER! Maybe check her out. ( She has been part of the famous 'girls with guitars' movement along with Brenda Kahn, Melissa Ferrick and Penelope Houston. And not to forget also Liz Phair! ) They might be some interesting influence for you.

2006-06-28 conejo:

OMG

2006-06-28 caught in the rain: *smiles* Thanks Alex :P but not that good >>; Ill help you with that mp3 changing thingy mabob if you like? we can puzzle over it together at your house XD lol!

2006-10-19 exmember4: very good girl!
continue taht and a lot of guitar fantasies will make you a Star! ^_^

2006-11-03 caught in the rain: Thankyou so much :3